Friday, May 13, 2016

Analyzing First and Last Sentences + A Giveaway

Hello, all! I'm still bushwacking my way through the land of never-ending revisions, but fortunately Chrys Fey is here to prevent My Pet Blog from falling by the wayside. She's here to talk about analyzing those first and last sentences, and there's even a giveaway at the end!

Take it away, Chrys!

Analyzing First and Last Sentences

First and last sentences of chapters are always my favorite to write. I always try to make them enticing. I want readers to keep reading. If they plan on stopping for the night, I want them to read the last sentence of a chapter and to be compelled to stay up later. Accomplishing this is much easier later in my story when the crimes and disasters start happening, but I think I do a decent job with the first few chapters.

Let’s take a look. Shall we?

Chapter One:

Begins: Beth didn’t die.

Ends: She stretched out on the chairs, letting exhaustion take over her body, and drifted off to sleep.

Yes, Beth is alive! And she’s safe enough to want to take a nap. Aren’t you just relieved? This chapter directly leads off the ending of Hurricane Crimes where Beth and Donovan arrive at the police department and start to head toward the doors. Well, we get a deeper look into their journey to the police department and actually follow them when they step inside. Of course, things don’t go as planned.

Chapter Two:

Begins: Donovan sat with his back straight against the metal chair, his cuffed hands clasped on top of the table.

Ends: “I don’t want your apology. I want you to help me get Buck.”

See what I mean? Donovan is in cuffs in the first sentence. At least he got an apology by the end of the chapter, though. That should be a good sign, right? Maybe...the problem is no one knows where Buck, the killer, is and Donovan hates that the man is free.

Chapter Three:

Begins: A hand cupped Beth’s arm and gently shook her awake.

Ends: She woke once when Donovan eased onto the cot and took her into his arms.

It’s kind of funny that I start this chapter with her waking up and end it with her sleeping again. But you have to forgive her...enduring a hurricane, killing a bad guy and trying to prove Donovan’s innocence aren’t easy things to do.

Chapter Four:

Begins: Donovan didn’t mind being stuck in the police department.

Ends: She squeezed his hand. “Because I have faith.”

This may be the second chapter in Donovan’s POV, but it’s the first one where we can really dig into his personality and get to know him. We experience his grief and lust in one chapter.

Title: Seismic Crimes
Author: Chrys Fey
Series: Disaster Crimes Series (Book Two)
Publisher: The Wild Rose Press
Format: Digital and Print
Page Count: 282




An Internal Affairs Investigator was murdered and his brother, Donovan Goldwyn, was framed. Now Donovan is desperate to prove his innocence. And the one person who can do that is the woman who saved him from a deadly hurricane—Beth Kennedy.

From the moment their fates intertwined, passion consumed him. He wants her in his arms. More, he wants her by his side in his darkest moments.

Beth Kennedy may not know everything about Donovan, but she can’t deny what she feels for him. It’s her love for him that pushes her to do whatever she has to do to help him get justice, including putting herself in a criminal’s crosshairs.

When a tip reveals the killer's location, they travel to California, but then an earthquake of catastrophic proportions separates them. As aftershocks roll the land, Beth and Donovan have to endure dangerous conditions while trying to find their way back to one another. Will they reunite and find the killer, or will they lose everything?



About the Author

Chrys Fey is the author of Hurricane Crimes, Book One in the Disaster Crimes series, as well as these releases from The Wild Rose Press: 30 Seconds, Ghost of Death, and Witch of Death. She is an administrator for the Insecure Writer's Support Group and has participated in the Blogging from April A to Z Challenge.

When Fey was six years old, she realized she wanted to be a writer by watching her mother pursue publication. At the age of twelve, she started writing her first novel, which flourished into a series she later rewrote at seventeen.

Fey lives in Florida and is always on the lookout for hurricanes. She has four adopted cats who keep her entertained with their antics, and three nephews who keep her entertained with their antics. You can connect with her on Facebook, Twitter, and through her blog, Write with Fey. She loves to get to know her readers!

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  1. Hi, MJ! Thank you for having my on your blog today to analyze a few sentences! :D

    1. Happy to do it. Come back anytime, Chrys. :)

  2. First and especially last sentences are very important in every chapter.

  3. I look at my first and last sentences of most chapters, but it's mostly because I'm panicking that I'm ending them all the same.

  4. Interesting, I usually think of first and last chapters, not lines. I want to go back and look at all of mine now.

    1. Gah, I always comment before I see if the ROLFcopters has a question. Have I ever been in a national disaster? Sorta. I lived in SF for a year and got woken up by a 4.2 earthquake across the bay.

    2. The first and last lines are important because they hook the reader and keep them reading.

      I wouldn't want to be woken up by a 4.2 quake.

  5. I hadn't thought to do this. I generally end chapters at the "it needs to end here" point.

    1. I like my chapters to end on a note to get readers to keep reading, but a lot of chapters do end in the way you mention.

  6. You are amazing Chrys. I dread the first and last sentences. I don't feel like I've perfected the art yet. I tend to overthink it.

  7. Nice way to give us a taste of your story, Chrys. :-)

  8. Great lines, Chrys! And wonderful teasers. :)

  9. Great job, Chrys! I like looking at the comparison. :)

  10. I try and map out the 'cymbal crash' before I start writing a chapter. It helps. Your tips are awesome, and I made notes.

    Hello to MJ. I recently read your Effigy and loved it. When will #2 be out?

    1. Hello, Tabatha! While Book #2 has no official release date yet, we're aiming for a late 2016 or early 2017 release. :)